In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they like. To what extent should children have to follow rules?
Freedom plays a pivotal role in everybody’s life. We can see in today’s modernized era that nobody likes to be restricted, whether it is a child or an adult. Some people think that there should some strict rules of behavior for children, but I disagree with this statement.
In other words we have to look other aspects as well, if we usually ignore our children’s bad habits, then they good human beings in their future life. Moreover if we never draw attention the children’s main activities then they might end up in a bad company. They the value of respect for their elders importance of relationships. They their cultural values as well.
In a nutshell, I would like to say that children should be the value of their customs, rituals and respect towards their elders for their future life, but most of the additional restriction should . It would good human beings in their future.
This is a good, well-written essay. Some sentences are too short and could be combined together to create a more complex structure. There is also some repetition of words, which should be avoided. Overall, nicely done.
I would like to learn which is the difference of the following words: illness, disorden and diseases. I am not sure if mental diseases is correct.
Mental illness is the correct term
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Is it argument essay???
Yes, it is. The question can be rephrased as follows to make that clearer: “Some say that children should have very strict rules of behavior, however, others think that children should be allowed to do almost anything they like. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”
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I’m currently practicing to take my exam in almost a month! I desperately need to get a 7 score in my academic writing! Do you think this essay is of 7 quality or is a 7?
I was thinking making systematic mistakes drops your mark significantly! This sample is my silver lining 🙂
Is this a 7 band essay??
Yes, that is correct.
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