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IELTS Report, topic: Two bar charts showing the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls (from IELTS High Scorer’s Choice series, Academic Set 3)

This is a model response to a Writing Task 1 topic from High Scorer’s Choice IELTS Practice Tests book series (reprinted with permission). This answer is close to IELTS Band 9.

Set 3 Academic book, Practice Test 12

Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar charts below show the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls aged 12 to 19 years by ethnicity, in the United States for the years 2004 and 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Two bar charts showing the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls (from IELTS High Scorer's Choice series, Academic Set 3 book)

Sample Band 9 Report

This report refers to two bar charts. The first gives data on obesity in boys by ethnicity between the ages of twelve and nineteen in the United States for 2004 and 2014, and the second gives the same data for girls.

Overall, it is clear that in both demographics the percentage of obese teenagers increased by 2014, with Hispanic boys and Non-Hispanic Black girls being the most at risk.

In boys, the obesity figures for 2004 were similar for all three ethnicities given, at 12, 11 and 13 per cent for Non-Hispanic White, Non-Hispanic Black and Hispanic respectively. In 2014, these figures rose to 17, 20 and 27 per cent for the same ethnicities. All the figures for 2014 are significantly higher compared to 2004, especially the last, with over a quarter of this ethnic group being classed as obese.

In girls, the obesity figures for 2004 were similar to boys for Non-Hispanic White and Hispanic, at 9 and 12 per cent respectively. The figure for Non-Hispanic Black was significantly higher for girls at 16 per cent. In 2014, Non-Hispanic White and Hispanic both rose 5 per cent and remained less than their male counterparts. Non-Hispanic Black girls, however, rose to 29 per cent, which is the highest figure in both charts.

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IELTS essay, topic: Artificial Intelligence will take over the role of teachers (agree/disagree)

This is a model response to a Writing Task 2 topic from High Scorer’s Choice IELTS Practice Tests book series (reprinted with permission). This answer is close to IELTS Band 9.

Set 6 Academic book, Practice Test 26

Writing Task 2

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some people feel that with the rise of artificial intelligence, computers and robots will take over the roles of teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

Sample Band 9 Essay

With ever increasing technological advances, computers and robots are replacing human roles in different areas of society. This trend can also be seen in education, where interactive programs can enhance the educational experience for children and young adults. Whether, however, this revolution can also take over the role of the teacher completely is debatable, and I oppose this idea as it is unlikely to serve students well.

The roles of computers and robots can be seen in many areas of the workplace. Classic examples are car factories, where a lot of the repetitive precision jobs done on assembly lines have been performed by robots for many years, and medicine, where diagnosis, and treatment, including operations, have also been assisted by computers for a long time. According to the media, it won’t also be long until we have cars that are driven automatically.

It has long been discussed whether robots and computers can do this in education. It is well known that the complexity of programs can now adapt to so many situations that something can already be set up that has the required knowledge of the teacher, along with the ability to predict and answer all questions that might be asked by students. In fact, due to the nature of computers, the knowledge levels can far exceed a teacher’s and have more breadth, as a computer can have equal knowledge in all the subjects that are taught in school, as opposed to a single teacher’s specialisation. It seems very likely, therefore, that computers and robots should be able to deliver the lessons that teachers can, including various ways of differentiating and presenting materials to suit varying abilities and ages of students.

Where I am not convinced is in the pastoral role of teachers. Part of teaching is managing behaviour and showing empathy with students, so that they feel cared for and important. Even if a robot or computer can be programmed to imitate these actions, students will likely respond in a different way when they know an interaction is part of an algorithm rather than based on human emotion.

Therefore, although I feel that computers should be able to perform a lot of the roles of teachers in the future, they should be used as educational tools to assist teachers and not to replace them. In this way, students would receive the benefits of both ways of instruction.

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